Round Three= Stephen Leslie

I don't completely understand the Haibun  form of poetry but while  I was reading Stephen Leslie's poems I started to get a feel for what they were. In the poem Her Voice, I like the short thoughts in the sentences that makes it almost choppy but still flows like here, " She studies the maps and quickly computes a new route. She only speaks when necessary. Her voice, while feminine, is neither sexy nor nagging." The poems also have 3- 4 short lines at the bottom. Which I like because it almost gives you the "answer" to the begining part of the poem

"Cold black granite walls

The Vietnam Memorial

I touch Joe's name "

The poem keeps you guessing which I really like but then at the end helps you figure out the mystery which is something I think is cool. In Elevator music, shows the side of Leslie where the poem is very emotional and you relate or have empathy becaus eof the story or the experience.

My poem:

Baseball Hat

Simple. Orange hat with the brim, so warn its fraying. Clemson? Not the reason to be bought. The hat is simpel, vibrant. Nothing more, nothing less. The stories mean so much more. Nicknames embroidered on the side. Growing up, with the hat, in the hat. Protection from the evils of the world. Snow. Rain. The Sun.

Simple joy

Much protection

Baseball Hat

Her Voice

Joe
Elevator music

1/10 speaker (****)